wow, what a great narrative! Are you making a novel? I am not a literary critic but honestly it seems to me that your text is very clean, well narrated and with defined characters. I think I'm reading a chapter of a best sellers. I really loved reading you. It is not common to see such dense literary texts in steemit. I will try to find time to read the other chapters. Greetings to Mattias and you Hive account@cardforge