Your playing keeps getting better.
U need an agent.

How about taking out the F note and replacing w balls. Then you say “it’s cold as balls, SNOWBALLS!!!, in Sweden”.
Then each refrain you seemingly say a bad word but then go back and clean it up a half beat later with a quick interjection?

Can you lop off the awkward endings where we watch you turn off the recording device? Really a lot of fun endings to songs and performances possible and this isn’t one of them. Say this with full time nderstanding of “and what fucking songs are YOU writing mister?” Just throwing it out there while we take a dump, DUMPTRUCK!!!, to the repair yard!

Also, so many fun words for schlang, root, rod, meatwhistle, and bologna pony to be using the anatomically correct word in our favorite line in the song. This is for comedy or your hot HS anatomy teacher?

Remember people
Like a puzzle where everything isn’t obvious. This is why poetry and Jim Morrison and one Don McLean sing are so popular. Let people think they are clever by not being as obvious but also not too shrouded. That comedian Dennis would make more money if his references weren’t as obscure— but bc they are the smarty pants crowd adores him. How gaudy your humor is, affects what type of audience to whom you Appeal.

This is some good shit, you could earn great money playing in irish shore bars. We’ve seen it.

Can you play a cover called “Kilkenny Man”?

Very Steve Poltzian stuff.

But seriously, forgive us, we wrote this while sitting on the can, CANTINA barstool!