a troubled dream:
clouds swallowed
those mountains
After checking out the cloud-themed contest by (https://steemit.com/lovetheclouds/@tobetada/welcome-to-the-love-the-clouds-contest-9) I was inspired to have a browse through my haiku for cloud related works and was pretty surprised to discover I have written basically zero (Surprising because I write and publish a LOT of haiku. Lots of mentions of wind in there, some stars and sea but nothing in clouds!)
So this piece is an adaptation of a haiku I'd previously written where 'clouds' was 'night' before - but I actually prefer this version :). I always felt something wasn't quite right with 'night' and 'swallowed' as the second line. 'Clouds' here introduces a nice prolonged -ol sound reinforced in swallowed that really conjures an image of engulfing cloud cover. Sometimes a haiku takes a few months (or years) to bring to life but it's always satisfying when something slips into place like that!
The image is my own, one of the last sunsets over m previous field sites. Appropriately dark for the subject matter, I think :)