not trying to troll/be mean, but just wondering: what's going on with your first two sentences? the first one is a fragment and i don't know what to say about the second one. i had to stop because it's too frustrating to read. i don't know if there's some software involved screwing up your sentences or you're not a native english speaker or maybe some other issue, but i've noticed it in some of your other stories too. sometimes it makes me think the writer is not the person in the profile picture and this is all a ploy/psyop, but maybe that's just me. :)