Hello community!
So i have been writing for my short film project and i would love to get some feedback on my work. This is the first draft of my short film and ill be posting all the progress as i go through this project. I have set a deadline for this project which is by the end of this December. Hoe you enjoy!
The SCRIPT:
EXT.Forest morning
Its a dark morning, Birds fly over the dense forest. lightning shines inside the heavy dark clouds. The weather is about to get worst.
We see a young vulnerable animal sitting in the middle of the frame surrounded by the creepy deep forest.
Tiger Snarling (O.S.)
A Tiger moves from left to the right side of the frame in the foreground. camera zooms in on the animal.A sudden thunder strikes and the frame dissolves to white
jump cut
INT. OFFICE mid-day
Tigers snarling dissolves into coffee machine sound. A closeup shot of a coffee cup filling up.
We see the tiger and the animal in a small office room. Tiger proceeds towards his work table next to the animal.
CUT TO
a small montage of tiger slowly settling on his work chair. Closeup of char pulling out, coffee mug placed on the table beside the keyboard, the tiger sits on the chair, closeup of his hands pulling in. Tiger places his hand on the mouse. Click
We close in on tigers face he seems extremely bored. Tiger looks at his colleague.His colleague is typing, we hear a constant annoying sound of the keyboard. Tiger is really irritated but he chooses to ignore it and looks at his monitor screen. We see a new window on the screen. The cursor moves to new project button, we hear a mouse click and the the whole frame dissolves to black.
CUT TO
Int. Computer machine
Close up of tiger staring at the huge software interface in front of him. We see a stopwatch countdown. Tiger opens a new browser window and plays a song and returns back to the software.
Tiger creates a new 3d shape and another and another while trying to arrange and balance them. The composition seems unstable.
Tiger suddenly looks at his left at a message notification.
Tiger walks towards the screen and starts chatting.
The composition trembles and rearranges itself.
Tiger closes the message box and looks back at the composition confused.
Montage of tiger getting everything at its original place again. Camera pans away from him and towards the coffee mug.
The steam from the coffee slowly surrounds the tiger from all sides.
wide shot of tiger unconsciously floating towards the coffee mug. The composition rearranges itself.
Tiger comes back at the composition but this time he is angry. Tiger rolls up his sleeves and gets back on rearranging the composition.
This time tiger struggles to move the objects. As he pushes harder some of the circuits in the computer starts breaking apart. We hear constant increasing loud noises as the pressure builds up.The noise of his colleagues keyboard, The rainy storm outside increases the overall tension.
Closeup of the coffee mug trembling and the mug falls down from the desk.
His colleague stops typing.
Closeup of computer screen the software crashes.
closeup of tiger agitated.
Tiger slowly picks up the coffee mug.
Top view of coffee machine. Tiger wants to fill the cup again but instead he keeps the mug on the table.
EXT.Cityscape Evening
Tiger comes out in the balcony of the office building.
closeup of tiger taking a deep breath.
The weather gets better slowly.
Wide shot of the building, Tiger gets back inside the office.
Whole composition morphs into the forest scene again and we see the tiger disappearing into the deep forest.
THE END.