one must go outside
to understand
the rooster's call
#2
One has to be outside
to understand the rooster's call
There, close, part of
Not in, away
The rooster calls
to establish connection
between humans inside
and all others out
#1
one has to be outside
to understand the rooster's call
there, close, part of
not in, away
the rooster calls
to establish connection
between humans inside
and all others out
our homes are temples to a false god
the god of man
any god of man
all false
all forget that man is part of natuer
not all of gods doing
god did not make man
man made god
god is a human construction
man made god in his own image
The first poem in bold italics is my entry to daily freewrite challenge.
The five minutes went like this:
I started the timer. I had the ineffable idea/feeling. I wrote until I thought I had the idea in there somewhere, #1. Then I started paring the thing down for #2. Time was running out! The rush, the rooster himself, produced my final version.
Thank you for reading my fabulous haiku! I am very happy with this one!!! And it gave me the rush of idea and feeling that only a freewrite poem can. Come give it a go with us at community. Lovely bunch of folks.
image is mine