You’re right — it reads too polished. A real country-cottage version should lean more rustic, with plainer furniture, a rougher quilt, simpler curtains, and a cheap cotton nightgown instead of something that feels styled, which fits the usual cottage look described by BHG and Canadian Log Homes.

The expression should also shift from fear to startled surprise: wider eyes, raised brows, slightly open mouth, and less tension in the jaw and hands. That matches the issue you flagged in your reply chain here, and it’s the right fix because fear makes her look like she’s seeing a murderer, not just something unexpected outside the window.