Welcome to theinkwell community. In this community, there are tips that you must follow and rules binding this community.
Your story of jive, but you need to follow the community guidelines.
The link below can put you through in your writing skills:
@theinkwell/catalog-of-fiction-writing-tips-from-the-ink-well
Also read this:
@theinkwell/the-ink-well-manifesto-for-writers-readers-and-investors
RE: A night with Grandma