What a lot of colourful and interesting elements this story has, (I don't know who to allude to, Hive account@sonofremi or Hive account@miles101).

It's a story that demands a lot of attention if the reader doesn't want to get lost among so many details. I notice the enthusiasm, the strength and the time invested in building the story.

Perhaps you could consider a clearer plot, one that the reader can easily remember, without giving up the fantastic character of this text.

You might want to check out the writing tips on our home page.

Keep writing.