The voice in this piece feels inconsistent with a developing writer and leans heavily on generalized phrasing and familiar emotional beats. You introduce many emotional moments situated in death/loss but don't give them the space to breathe. As a result, the reader cannot sit with them and has to move on before fully appreciating the previous loss. I'm curious as to what work have you done on developing your craft this past year, or is this you coming back to writing after a time away and looking to start over?