Thanks for sharing your story with us Hive account@onyema-norbert. We appreciate the effort you have made. However, we feel your story could be developed, so we would like to offer you some great resources that could help you to develop your writing skills.

Be sure to check out our catalogue of fiction writing tips which provides a list of all the helpful articles on fiction writing.

For example:

• The Action, Dialog and Narrative: The Dynamic Trio article provides great tips for developing your stories.
• The Help for the Grammatically Challenged article provides important tips on how to use Google Docs to draft your stories. It will point out errors that need to be fixed, and you can fix them by clicking on them.

These resources can help you continually improve the quality of your stories.

All good wishes:)