Dear Mr.Justino . Hope this message finds you well, i am X from East Africa, Ethiopia, i am working at Y as Z, so could you review my resume for the opportunity please . Thanks

Findings

• Not defining what you are searching for nor at what location /regions
• Sending an unnecessary attached PDF when with 1 click I can see profile
• Very Weak LinkedIn Summary without objectives' definition
• Confusing Headline
• Job positions without any description of accountabilities

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