Thanks for your constructive criticism. I have much room for improvement on my structure, this is true. When writing for mobile phones content needs to have space otherwise with busy people the won't read when they see content rich paragraphs. I probably went a little overboard here and I do agree with your proposals. I hope you see me improve on this!

Science is a method of inquiry. You have a hypothesis and you design an experiment to test the hypothesis. I made statements about the nature of who we think we are vs who we truly are and gave a method for readers to inquire about the truth of this hypothesis. I believe that is science.