I really like this piece but sorry to point this out "An interesting day went by,
I met with you and time flew" would be better if it was "An interesting day went by,
I met with you and oh how time flies" i know you wanted by and fly to rhyme but it couldnt work because it wouldnt be grammatically correct....in cases like that..i just change the structure of the sentence....
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