hey man. look forward to more poetry. the short lines add breath and time to reflect on each line as well as a sense of urgency. is this intended? either way, it paints a vivid - yet casual picture of the human barrier and threat of violence that protects the state. I myself have reflected "am i being paranoid? dramatic?" i say always question the systems people take for granted - its the only way the world can progress. cheers!
RE: Forbidden Zone - An Original Poem