"Restless Eyes" P.1
I lay here;
Thinking.
Exhausted,
Unsettled.
'Ready' 'Set' 'Go!'
My mind starts to race.
Dilligently I wait for rest.
"Dreams of Dreams" P.2
I'll be at the pictures once more,
A director staging morsels of me.
My life.
My feelings.
My surroundings slowly seep through into slumber.
Forever enchanted
Are my dreams of dreams.
I wrote these two poems a few nights ago when I couldn't sleep.
To me they are quite short and mainly direct in what the try and convey and the incorporation of pauses in the grammar helped me emphasise the loneliness and rigidness I was feeling. I also tried to convey an overall neutral and tardy emotional response with the grammar and use of words.
Let me know what you think about them, such as if I have anything to improve on or if you have a topic or an idea you would like me to try and incorporate as poetry.
Also everyone analyses differently so if you have a different take on this (e.g its complete garbage feel free to add it below :) )
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