I think the intro is a good addition. I still think you have a pretty nasty view of God, but at least you're upfront about it.

I'd still like to hear you answer the question how it's not torture if God is the one keeping the souls alive forever in Hell. I think we both agree that life is a gift of God, right? And that life only continues because God wills it? (Again, from Hebrews 1 among other verses)