Hi. It gives me work to read your stories because they have no spaces between paragraphs. I don't know if it's a writing style or an oversight.
In general, I liked several dialogues and the pace is very good.

"I guess I just have someone of a fashion sense from my sisters."

This dialogue, for example, opens immense possibilities in the narrative.

A cordial greeting. It was a pleasure to have read Hive account@madds19