This is beautiful– not perfect from a technical standpoint, but beautiful. I felt the emotions of the main character, his longing for a life that seems beyond his reach, the incredulity of being offered a chance, the absolute wordlessness of being given everything you’ve ever dreamed. It takes a writer to be able to do that, and you’ve got that gift. I look forward to seeing what else you post!
Cheers, Mako
RE: Day On the Water: Original Short Story