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You can find part 1 of this story here.
To quote Vincent Price as I heard him say at the beginning of one of his movies: "Let's begin shall we?"
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The Mausoleum part 2
Everyone hears Victoria's screams inside the mortuary office.
She is screaming at a small built man with a pale face. He is the funeral director and may be able to help her get what she wants.
Victoria tries to calm herself and continues in a loud voice, “I want proof his body is in there!”
The only thing louder is the sound of the thunder outside the window. A storm is approaching.
The funeral director, Ralph, “Don’t be ridiculous of course his body is there, why wouldn’t it be?”
Pushing past her he feels a strong resistance moving her body out of the way.
“It is time to put an end to this you must leave at once or I will call security.”
When Victoria stops ranting absolute silence engulfs the room.
The funeral director looks out the window to see if it is raining before slamming the window shut.
Victoria is nowhere to be seen; only the open doorway remains.
She is more determined now than ever to get answers.
This overwhelming feeling to know the truth will not leave her.
She must find a reason to open the crypt, which leads her to a gruesome discovery many are not aware of.
Unless there is ventilation in a crypt, the body can explode, leading to a leaking situation, creating a stench - as many cemetery workers can attest to.
This is the information Victoria decides to use to get access to her husband’s body.
Back home she prepares a cup of tea, sits down and begins to write in her diary.
Minutes later the heavy bronze doorknocker falls several times in a row.
I am in no mood for visitors. No mood.
Opening the door slowly she slams it shut.
“Not now. Go away, I have seen you following me and want nothing from you.”
Here is Part three
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photograph using Canon T6 Hyperfocal Technique 18mm lens
Thank you for taking this journey with me.