Good job! A little advice from a 71 year old writer...stick to words you're familiar with, or use a thesaurus. Headlights don't interrogate. Really, that's the only criticism I have. Good job painting the picture...I got the imagery. A few comma errors (even at 71, I make them too). I see you're fond of ellipses, I like to use them too. My overall advice...keep writing, you have a knack for it. The more you write, the better you get. And don't take failing English too hard, better writers than either one of us have been in the same predicament.