It's a good effort, but you're not really going to change anything. The reason why companies have TOS agreements is to protect themselves. Thus they are legal documents. The reason why legal documents are hard to read is because they must be written in the form of a legal document otherwise they can be challenged in court.

If a company makes TOS agreements simpler to read they open themselves up to suit based on the document being to vague.

Being able to sue a company is a consumer's greatest recourse for making companies behave themselves. It is also one of the consumers greatest problems such as the resulting TOS agreements