Hive account@lval115 - it is an interesting story about a girl with MPD right? However you might want to flesh out the details a little more. There is so much here that is just crammed together. You have a lot of opportunities in the story to go into more details - also it is not realistic - you might have to read some case studies of how psychiatrists deal with MPD - you could do away with the psychiatrist altogether and just have Harper and Mary talking to a friend instead - or 2 different friends thaknow both Harper and Mary... that's my suggestion - but it's a good start! Keep up the good work.