Excellent story, and I can tell you polished that one many times over. Would you ever be interesting in getting some editting feedback before you post? I'm mushroomjesus@gmail.com if you want to collaborate. I have one story posted on Steemit, many more in Google Docs, but after reading a few different fiction writers on this site, I think we have the most similar style. If not our content, I can tell you painstakingly decide how things are phrased. Thunderous crickets? That one got me! Anyways, I wish there were a way to contact you through this site, there's my email. Aloha from Hawaii!